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Posted in: Grape Growing by admin on June 17, 2010
REPRISE
Lion in Judah
There is much dread
The barren places
Cold, dark, deep, and high.
Manipulated
Governed by our fear
Interest conflicts
Narrowness constricts.
Brother fights brother
Hating those afar
Distrusting those near
Claiming race and place.
Fig tree infertile
Knowing not season
Vine bearing sour grapes
Knowing not reason.
Hidden in a wall
There the viper bites
In an outstretched hand
Pound a cruel nail.
Unloving parent
Disrespectful child
Abused abusing
Garden growing wild.
Ruled by appetite
Never have enough
Displaced relations
Desecrated faith..
Sharpening our spears
Strapping on our swords
Diversified wars
No attempt at words.
Mission accomplished.
(Some thought my last one too optimistic.)
Responsible
Peace is not promise
Plowshares must be beat
Pruning hooks sharpened.
Plow to fig tree roots
Prune back sour grape vine
Rest then unafraid
To learn war no more.
Lion in Judah
Lift your people’s heads.
Mountains and hills sing
Woods and fields flower.
Strong hold no power
Poor man not trod down
Warfare’s night ended
Justice will prevail.
Call locusts, hoppers
Eat useless stubble
Wrath’s pot is out-poured
The almond blossoms.
Chosen stones laid out
Plumb line held to wall
Lift keystone in place
By right raise the arch.
Fig tree by the way
Vines growing sour grapes
East, west , north, and south
Crowds enter by foot.
Where are the Holy
Trusting in the Law?
Shamed by the despised
Set at God’s right hand.
Desert road is built
Lion and Lamb sleep
High and low made plain,
Drink from nearby pools.
We our dream of hope
Desire of right to come
Dig, feed the fig tree,
And prune the sour grapes.
Tend fire and anvil
Do job to be done,
Beat from pride new tools
Lion’s battle won—
We can, we are One!
Add "We’re" to Responsible.
K. I read and enjoyed your Haikun, answered by other poets I also greatly respect. I am impressed.
Isaiah 2:4.
I don’t think it is too optimistic… It is true… Fight and fight, but no attempt to negotiate for peace… A word may not be enough, words from all can bring it to an end…
EDIT: Thank you… I enjoyed your poems (first and second) as well… They are excellent… I have added you as a contact as well… Hope you don’t mind…
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I don’t think it is too optimistic… It is true… Fight and fight, but no attempt to negotiate for peace… A word may not be enough, words from all can bring it to an end…
EDIT: Thank you… I enjoyed your poems (first and second) as well… They are excellent… I have added you as a contact as well… Hope you don’t mind…
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Comment by Kyuuzuryu on June 18, 2010 at 3:32 am